The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish
The given diagram illustrates the life cycle of salmon from birth to maturity.
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it is clear that
there are six important stages for fish from egg until maturity. It is Linking Words
also
noticeable that fish spend their life in three different locations, namely estuary, rearing area and spawning area.
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To begin
with, in the first stage of the diagram we can see that salmon went to the incubation from spawning where it can emerge and it went to the freshwater rearing. After that, salmon went to the estuary where they can spend some of their life in estuary rearing until they migrated to rearing water. Linking Words
Finally
, after migrating fishes to the rearing areas they grew and maturated in oceans and send again to the spawning areas.Linking Words
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