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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #cities #place #countryside
In modern
time
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, choosing the place to live plays a vital role in the
life
 of everybody , especially young people. Somebody believed that metropolis
are
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the
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 suitable place to live
whereas
 another
disagree
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 with
this
 statement. It is the opinion of
this
 writer that the latter choice is the best option. There can be no doubt that living in the cities, we will have more convenient
center
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 serve for entertainment ,health and education. Not only that, it
also
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 the place where humans can find
the
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a
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well-paied
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well-paid
 job easily without high
demanding
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. In spite of
this
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these
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 advantages, it
also
have
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 more reverses as higher levels of crime and criminally expensive living costs.
For instance
, living in the urban,dweller need to show their
responsibilites
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responsibilities
responsibility
 for their fortune if not they will not have an opportunity to find it again. Another point worth
consideration
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 is that
be
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 settled in
the
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 rural area
also
 have two
two
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main benefits. For a start, the pace of
life
 is slower. When living in the
countrysides
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countryside
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, the living costs
lower
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 than
the
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in the
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 cities so dwellers do not mind about their
life
 as the city's residents. The
last
 one is the ease of traffic in the rush hour. In the rush hour of cities, the congestion is more and more serious
while
 in the countryside it is not so.From my point of view , I am really keen on
life
 in the countryside, cultivating a sense of community is really great, they often help others when we have difficulties in
life
.
Besides
, I
also
 the peaceful atmosphere and spectacular natural landscapes
in
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here. Taking everything into account, people always may vary in their opinion, but I believe that rural areas provide a better-quality
life
,
a
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lower living costs , leisurely in traffic and the atmosphere. It doesn't matter whether you live in the countryside or in the city, but make the decision that feels suitable for you
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