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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Other prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is thought the best place to live is in cities
while
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 others prefer to live in the
countryside
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.
This
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agree
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 with the first statement as its modern. On the one hand, cities are a suitable place for young
people
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 to live because there is a lot of thing in there
such
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 as shopping mall, stadium, luxury restaurant,etc a lot of places to go, so living in the
city
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 make young
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people’
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 life more
variety
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.
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, there is more service in the
city
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, it is more convenient if you want to use them.
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, there are many good hospitals in the
city
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 and you can go
to
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there to have
medical
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 examination and treatment easier than in the
countryside
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, old
people
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is prefer
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 to live in the
countryside
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 because in
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countryside
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the countryside
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, the atmosphere is more peaceful and the pace of life is slower, so
live
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 in the
countryside
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 is for
people
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who
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who are stressed by their work, staying in the
countryside
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 would be a great choice to involve in a quiet and peaceful atmosphere. What is more, forming a friendly and relaxing environment for the natives,
people
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 who live in the
city
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 are too busy with their work and they don’t have time to think about other
people
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while
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people
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 in the
countryside
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 are very love
people
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surrounded
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surrounding
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 them. In conclusion,
live
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living
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 in the cities is more convenient as
its
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it's
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 diverse
of
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things,
live
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living
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 in the
countryside
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 is not a bad choice for
people
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 who want to enjoy their life.
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