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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #cities #place #countryside
Nowadays, most
of
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people
 decided to live in
cities
 because of
its
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 convenience, but there are some opinions
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 that suburb is a perfect
place
 to live. From my perspective, both places have their own positive aspects, no matter where you live
in
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, as long as you
happy
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 and feel comfortable. Honestly, I prefer the comfort of living in a big
city
than
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 a rural area and I will give the pros and cons
in
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 each
places
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place
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 throughout
this
 essay and try to draw
conclusion
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a conclusion
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.
Initially
, there is an enormous number of modern services
are
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located in the
city
 which gives easy access to everybody to support their daily life.
For instance
, stores like
supermarket
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supermarkets
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, banks, clothes
shop
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shops
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 and so forth are available everywhere so citizens do not have to go far to get what they need.
Moreover
, In a big
city
, you have many opportunities to approach a higher quality in
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terms
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 of education, medical and transportation.
As a result
that
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you have a good condition to develop and improve yourself so as to make your life better.
On the other hand
, living in a big
city
 still has some
problem
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problems
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 that you have to accept
such
 as traffic. It is one of the main
disadvantage
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 when you live in
this
place
. Many
people
 drive by car every day and it entails residents in large
cities
have
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 to deal with rush-hour traffic on the way to work, school and on
way
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 back. Another point worth considering is that there are more environmental issues in the
cities
 than
the
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 countryside because of toxic gases from cars and industries.
Consequently
,
people
 may get lung disease and respiratory problems. All in all, it is not really a big obstacle because
government
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governments
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 are acting to find solutions for
people
 who suffer from
the
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air pollution in
cities
.
Secondly
, more old
people
 choose to live in rural
place
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places
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 in search of fresh air.
Furthermore
,
people
 in
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the suburb
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suburb
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suburbs
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 are very friendly and
this
place
filled
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is filled
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 with solace and peace so many
people
 like to live in.
However
, it is not convenient enough for
people
 to have a better standard of living because of outdated
facilitie
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facilities
 and
service
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services
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. In conclusion, each of
places
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 has both metrics and drawbacks as well. In my opinion,
high
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 quality of living in
city
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the city
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 and better equipment in medicine and education make
cities
 a better
place
 to live without
regarding
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 to
the
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other problems.
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