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Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to watch TV regularly at home and at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are different materials available when learning. One option proposed is by watching television daily. As
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children
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 are vouched to constantly watch TV not only in the comforts of their homes but
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 in school. Personally, I do not completely agree with
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 notion and in
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 essay, I shall explain why. As early as childhood, learning has always been an integral aspect of one's life. May it be through reading a book or personal experience, it can not be denied that a person can learn everywhere and anywhere. 
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, not everyone has the same method for learning and oftentimes,
children
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 to be exact, learn visually. These young ones could be advised to watch educational shows to
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 their knowledge, but despite the advantage, there should be limits to
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. The key word here is "regularly".
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, at some point, learning by watching has its merits, there are always disadvantages to it like violent and explicit movies,
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. If
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 would get the chance to watch shows like
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 all the time, their viewpoint towards life would 100 per cent change. They would most likely copy what they see and are prone to physical confrontation with their peers.  To counter
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, allowing restrictions on television at home and school would be the best option. Fewer screen time should open up other opportunities for learning like exploration and creativity. By and large, even though educating
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 by watching TV has its advantages, it is important to remember that
children
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 are young and easily influenced.
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, as adults, we should guide them
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 so that they would not go rogue on us.
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