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Teenagers in some nations work at jobs while they are still in school. Do you think it is a good idea for students to have jobs ? Use specific examples and reasons to explain your answer

#teenagers #nations #work #jobs #school #idea #students
Now a days
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Nowadays
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 things are getting more expensive and poor people cannot afford
it
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them
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.And people have no choice. Some
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students
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student
 have to work
also
 and go to school the difference between going to
the
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a
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 job
while
 they are still in school
student
. Some have poor family and some parents
wants
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 their child go to work.
student
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Students
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 those home do
this
 work are more from poor
family
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families
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. it is
nice
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a nice
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 idea for a
student
 to have jobs. There are many benefits after finishing school they can easily dissolve anywhere and eat. It will be very helpful for
future
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the future
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 too. There will be
a
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apply
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very
help
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for
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to
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 their family. But there
are
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is
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also
bad
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a bad
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idea
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ideas
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 for students to have jobs there will be
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an affect
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affect
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effect
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 on their
study
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studies
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 and
he
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they
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 can't bring good marks on
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the exam
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exam
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exams
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 they don't
had
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have
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 time
for
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to
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 study.
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