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Vaccinating children against preventable diseases is not only unnecessary but also dangerous. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Vaccination has always been a subject of debate among people. Some believe to the extreme extent that getting shot to counter curable diseases is not required
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 too risky for newborns and toddlers. In
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 essay, I will discuss why I am completely against the idea of vaccines being unnecessary and hazardous,
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 I have some regard for those in opposition.
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people who argue against it might have some reasons to do so. On some rare occasions, there might have been some severe side effects on a baby caused by a vaccine,
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, fever, paralysis, or even death. Persons who have witnessed those
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 of tragedies within their family or community might have these beliefs instilled in them.
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, there are a lot of conspiracy theories going around against vaccination and how it is a tool for population control and so on. Masses who are believers of
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 absurdity will definitely argue against it. Even though I do not believe those opinions, I acknowledge that believers have their reasons.
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, I believe injections are effective measures to deal with various curable and incurable illnesses.
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 many scientists and doctors researching tirelessly in the field, shots nowadays are more affordable, safe, and effective,
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 the side effects are greatly suppressed. If shots are not taken against any diseases at a young age and by any chance they
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 infected with a virus later in life, the treatment will be very expensive, which could have been easily prevented by taking a mere shot or two.
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, I believe vaccines are a boon to mankind. In conclusion, despite there being anti-vaccination supporters who question its safety and worthiness, I firmly stand on its side.
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, I believe it is an essential yet affordable measure to prevent various illnesses among children, and will potentially save them against those conditions for the rest of their lives.

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