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You recently borrowed an item of clothing from a friend. While you had this item, it was damaged. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter you should: apologise for damaging the item of clothing explain how it became damaged say what you will do to fix the problem

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Dear Sara, Hope you're doing well. It's more than a week that I've been trying to write to you but I feel literally embarrassed to tell you the truth that
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the black gown that I borrowed from you to wear to my uncle's wedding ceremony, is a bit torn. Actually, that night I was a bit drunk so when I was dancing, suddenly I felt dizzy and fell down. After the party, I recognized the lower part of the dress was torn. I mean other parts of the dress are not damaged at all. I've talked with Robert Jones, a well-known tailor in London, and he said he would be able to mend it in 1 week, so I'll return it to you before the end of
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 month. Once again, I'm sorry for the whole thing and Hope to see you soon. Best wishes Taban

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Consider expressing a more heartfelt apology to convey the sincerity of your regret more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Try to separate your explanation of how the damage occurred into its own paragraph to enhance clarity.
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You've used a friendly tone that is appropriate for writing to a friend, which adds a personal touch to your letter.
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The description of the incident is clear and engaging, helping to create a vivid picture for the reader.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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