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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given three pie charts represent the ratio of annual expenditure by domestic people who are
incharge
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in charge
 in Someland between 1980 and 2000.
Overall
, the spending on
the
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higher
education
 had the highest proportion
whereas
 the environmental services and other expenses had the lowest ratio in the period of 20 years. The total expenditure
of
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 higher
education
, transportation, and environmental services saw
noticeable
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a noticeable
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 upward trend over two decades
,
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 and reached
to
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40%, 22%,
9
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and 9
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% respectively. Spending on higher
education
's proportion was 35% in 1980, 10 years later almost half of the expenses were on higher
education
 which was decreased by 5% in 2000.
Moreover
, transportation
was
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also
 hit the bottom in 1990,
then
 inclined by 16% and reached the second significant expenditure area.
On the contrary
, the remaining categories three categories experienced a drop in the percentages of total spending over 20 years. The field of K-12
Education
 had
a quarter percentages
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a quarter percentage
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 of expenses in 1980,
nevertheless
,
this
 group
noticeable
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 decreased over time and declined to 18% in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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