The table shows the income and expenditure of Brooklyn Hall, the building used to hire in over the period of three years.

The table shows the income and expenditure of Brooklyn Hall, the building used to hire in over the period of three years.
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The table illustrates changes in
income
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and spending of a building for lease named Brooklyn Hall in three separate years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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its expenditure had increased far more considerably than
overall
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revenue, so profit had dropped over
this
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period. Hire of rooms remained the largest source of
income
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throughout these years, with fluctuations between 32,000 and 34,000
pounds
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. Fundings of council tower and other bodies had decreased by 5,000 and 2,000
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,
while
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cafe sales, which contribute a
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smaller
income
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, had doubled from 3,000 to 6,000
pounds
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. Brooklyn Hall recorded a noticeable growth of 6,000
pounds
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in total
income
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, and an enormous increase in it is running costs, reaching 77,000
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in the
last
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year. Meanwhile, profit saw a corresponding fall from 9,000
pounds
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to only 1,000
pounds
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by the end of the period in question.
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