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Many museums charge for admission while others are free . do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to musuems outweigh the disadvantages?

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Charging entry fees to
museums
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 is justified or not is a topic of debate in many countries. Some
people
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 have the opinion that entry fees for
museums
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 should be charged as it helps in the maintenance and upkeep of
museums
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.
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, it provides dollar revenue to the government as lots of foreign tourist flock to see
museums
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.
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 some think that
museums
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 should be free for visitors as
people
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 should able to see about their past history and culture. Most
people
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 argued that if
museums
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 are open for free it will create various problems like difficulty in managing crowds.
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,The chance of theft may increase .
people
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 will not value the importance of their rich cultural
heritage
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 if they are allowed to enter
museums
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 for free.
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, in ,Egypt museum fees are relatively high as the cost of maintenance is
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 high.
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, admission to
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 is paid . if will create funds for the upkeep of
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. It
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 provides financial assistance to the government . ,
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moreover
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 it will preserve cultural
heritage
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 in a secure way.
People
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 will value the importance of their
heritage
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 .
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, In India
museums
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 are restricted to paid visitors only as it helps in the upkeep of
museums
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 and protects cultural
heritage
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. In ,conclusion the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of keeping
museums
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 with paid entry.
Museums
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 are built to showcase the history of the culture of a particular region. It should be preserved and protected . That will only
achieved
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 be protected by paid entries to
museums
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.

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