Many museums charge for admission while others are free . do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to musuems outweigh the disadvantages?

Charging entry fees to
museums
is justified or not is a topic of debate in many countries. Some
people
have the opinion that entry fees for
museums
should be charged as it helps in the maintenance and upkeep of
museums
.
Also
, it provides dollar revenue to the government as lots of foreign tourist flock to see
museums
.
Whereas
some think that
museums
should be free for visitors as
people
should able to see about their past history and culture. Most
people
argued that if
museums
are open for free it will create various problems like difficulty in managing crowds.
Furthermore
,The chance of theft may increase .
people
will not value the importance of their rich cultural
heritage
if they are allowed to enter
museums
for free.
For instance
, in ,Egypt museum fees are relatively high as the cost of maintenance is
also
high.
However
, admission to
museums
is paid . if will create funds for the upkeep of
museums
. It
also
provides financial assistance to the government . ,
,
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it will preserve cultural
heritage
in a secure way.
People
will value the importance of their
heritage
.
for example
, In India
museums
are restricted to paid visitors only as it helps in the upkeep of
museums
and protects cultural
heritage
. In ,conclusion the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of keeping
museums
with paid entry.
Museums
are built to showcase the history of the culture of a particular region. It should be preserved and protected . That will only
achieved
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be protected by paid entries to
museums
.
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