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some people think cities are the best plave to live. Other prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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People
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 have different opinions about living places. Certain families like to live in the country space
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 others choose to stay in the
city
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 centre. Each place offers its own benefits and drawbacks and the following essay will discuss them in detail. On the one hand, a group of the community prefer to live in the main centre because they believe that there are a lot of benefits to living in the
area
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. It is a fact that the
city
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 offers various kinds of facilities,
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 as shopping malls, universities, cinemas, hospitals and restaurants,
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 it would not be difficult for the
city
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’s residents in finding education centres, food or entertainment. Cities offer more job opportunities as most of the companies and industries are situated there. Apart from that, there are certain facilities that are present only in
city
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areas
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 like amusement parks, large shopping malls, better schools etc.
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, living in the
city
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 has some negative sides as well. The common drawbacks are that the crime and air pollution rates in the
city
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 are commonly higher than in the rural
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.
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 some
people
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 choose to move out of the
city
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 centre.
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, some
people
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 think that the best place to live is in a rural
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. It is believed that
people
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 who live in these
areas
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 have a healthier life because they breathe fresher air, they eat more hygienic and natural fruits and vegetables and they live in a more relaxed and quieter environment.
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, their life expectancy is longer than those who live in cities or towns. Despite its positive sides, living in remote
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 have some disadvantages. Several
people
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 found that the quality of education in these
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 is left behind,
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 others feel that it is hard for them to develop their careers,
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 they choose to move to big cities. In conclusion, living in the
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 or the countryside has its own positive and negative sides, and it depends on the preference of each individual. I personally choose to live in the
city
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area
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 to enhance my career and plan to live in the countryside when I retire.
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