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The table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table is illustrating the three countries with the highest
population
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, which are
China
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,
India
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, and the United States of America.
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 provides information about how big the increase in society was since 2017, how many
people
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 are located related to every
square
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kilometre
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, how big is the area, and the percentage of the ones who live in urban areas. Of those three countries,
China
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 is the one that has more
population
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 of 1.415 billion humans. Following, we have
India
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 with 1.344 billion citizens. In third place is
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USA
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the USA
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 which has a
population
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 of 327 million. Since 2017
India
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 is the one who has increased drastically,
than
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USA
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the USA
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, and
China
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. Talking about the space per person.
India
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 represents the country with more
people
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 per
square
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kilometre
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.
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 means
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people
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 are living more crowded and less comfortably.
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 country has 455
people
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 per
square
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kilometre
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.
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, the
USA
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 is the opposite. Communities have more
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 to live happily and have more privacy; it has 36
people
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 per
square
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kilometre
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.
China
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 is the country with more land area, than
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USA
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the USA
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, and the
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 is
India
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. The one that has the biggest amount of urban
population
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 is the
USA
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 with 83 %, followed by
China
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 with 58% and
India
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 with 32%. In conclusion, Americans are the ones who live more relaxed. Which is the opposite of Indians. They have less land to live and their community is bigger.
China
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 is in the middle, but even if there are a lot of chinses, they have enough space to live ok.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, china, india, people, square, kilometre, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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