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The bar chart gives infornamtion about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.

The bar chart gives infornamtion about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.
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The given bar chart illustrates the average amount of vehicle trips
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entered into town by inhabitants and non-inhabitants.
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, there is almost a decade estimation in the bar chart from 1996 to 2005 and it provides information about the highest count of residents' auto located between 1996 to 1999 which were three times higher than the least number of motor between 2003 to 2004. It is noticeable that the unit of citizens’
cars
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 was lower than non-citizens’ in 1996,
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 the trend had been inverted to each other in 2005. As can be seen in the bar chart, the majority of residents’
cars
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 driving into the centre of town depicted in first 4 years (1996 to 1996) under 10000.
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, in 2000,
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parking meters had been added in the city centre and the average number of citizens’
cars
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 decreased dramatically
at
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 exactly 5000. At the same time, the sum of non-residents’
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cars
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 itineraries had increased steadily from 5000 to 8000 and even exceeded the ratios of the citizens’ automobile at approximately 8000 during the years from 2002 to 2002.
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, the quantities of residents’
cars
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 and non-residents’
cars
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 were both fallen off after
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Westgate Street and Park Lane were closed because of the traffic which accounted for about 3000 to 5000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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