You and a friend recently went on a holiday together. There is a problem with the photos you have taken during the holiday. Write a letter to your friend to ask for a particular shot. In your letter: ● tell him/her about the problem with your photos ● say which photo you would like him/her to send you ● explain why you need this photo.

Dear Andrei, I am writing to you regarding our recent getaway
together with
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our families to the mountains. To be more specific, I would like to ask you for a single photograph. Apparently,
while
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we were hiking down from the top of the mountain one of my children lost my camera.
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, I do not have any of the beautiful photos that I took during our lovely trip.
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, I have luckily remembered that you captured some images of us with your camera. Particularly, I am talking about the one that you got when we were at Souls Falls, I recall that you showed it to me at the campfire on the first night
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we were cooking our meal. If you could send that image to me, I would be so grateful. The reason is that my wife loved that photo
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,
therefore
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, I know she would love to put it in a frame in our living room in the section where all our travelling memories are placed. I really hope that you can find it. Best regards. Tomás Alcaide

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Consider adding more details about the hike or your time at the mountain to make your letter more personal. This can enrich your letter and create a stronger connection.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure the ideas in each paragraph flow nicely to improve the overall readability of your letter. You can use linking words to connect your thoughts better.
coherence and cohesion
Try to start your letter with a more engaging opening line that could briefly express your happiness about the trip, which would draw your friend in more.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear structure to your letter with a greeting, body, and closing.
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Your tone is friendly and suitable for writing to a friend, which makes the letter warm and inviting.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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