A local school is requesting ideas for renovations. Write to them and include Problems they have now Suggestions to change How they could make these changes

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing reading your recent advertisement in the newspaper, asking for recommendations for the idea of renovation of the school. As I have passed my schooling at the same school recently, during my stay, I always face issues with the availability of seats in the computer lab. As it has always been demanding subject lab always remains busy.

Secondly

, some systems were

also

outdated which affect on work speed of assignments. In terms of, improvement it is needed to increase the number of computers. I understand for the increased number of machines it is necessary to allocate specific space. To solve space issues you can utilize unused space in the library. By updating old systems with new ones it will be easy to complete tasks on time. For the purpose of both expansion and updating you can ask for extra funding from the government education authorities.

Furthermore

, you can plan to create some sort of extra fund saving for school allowances. Hope you will take my idea as considered for recreation. Yours faithfully, Jake kale

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