A local school is requesting ideas for renovations. Write to them and include Problems they have now Suggestions to change How they could make these changes

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing reading your recent advertisement in the newspaper, asking for recommendations for the idea of renovation of the school. As I have passed my schooling at the same school recently, during my stay, I always face issues with the availability of seats in the computer lab. As it has always been demanding subject lab always remains busy.

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outdated which affect on work speed of assignments. In terms of, improvement it is needed to increase the number of computers. I understand for the increased number of machines it is necessary to allocate specific space. To solve space issues you can utilize unused space in the library. By updating old systems with new ones it will be easy to complete tasks on time. For the purpose of both expansion and updating you can ask for extra funding from the government education authorities.

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, you can plan to create some sort of extra fund saving for school allowances. Hope you will take my idea as considered for recreation. Yours faithfully, Jake kale

jaimini2000Wed Aug 23 2023

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 7.0

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8 paragraphs

180 words

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A local school is requesting ideas for renovations. Write to them and include Problems they have now Suggestions to change How they could make these changes

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problem,as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

"Write a letter to your neighbour to ask him/her to take care of your house while you are away for a week on holiday. Please say •Explain where you are going and why. • What do you need him/her to do? • What should he/she do in case of emergency?"

Some children spend hours everyday on their smartphones. Why is this case ? do you think this is a positive or a negative development ?

Some people believe that no one should be allowed to continue working after the age of 65. However, others say there shouldn’t be a limitation on age, and anyone should be allowed to work regardless of their age. Discuss both views, give your opinion and include relevant examples.