The table gives information on the types and frequency of health issues at Todai Electronics in 2010

The table gives information on the types and frequency of health issues at Todai Electronics in 2010
The chart compares what kinds of health conditions male and female employees at Todai Electronics suffered from and how common those conditions were in 2010.
Overall
, both sexes reported foreign bodies in the eye to be the most frequent health issue, and
cases
of ingested chemicals came a second close. In sharp contrast, virtually no arm/hand injuries were reported by either gender. Regarding male workers, by far the most common condition was a foreign body in the eye, with 64
cases
, 10 of which required hospitalization. Ingested chemicals and hearing problems were rated second and
third,
with 42 and 31 minor
cases
respectively. A less frequent issue was foot
injury
, numbering 23 minor and 1 serious case. Workers in
this
category suffered almost no arm/hand
injury
, with the exception of one instance which required urgent medical attention. As for the opposite gender, just about the same number of
cases
of ingested chemicals and foreign bodies in the eye, totalling around 27. Hearing problems,
however
, were significantly less common, with only 13 minor
cases
.
Finally
, the least common
injury
was foot
injury
(2
cases
),
while
none of the female employees sustained any arm/hand injuries.
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