The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012.

The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012.
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how the average temperature data and the revenue for the
sales
of bathing
suits
in New York for the early half of 2012.
Overall
, there was an increase in temperature as we reached the summer, with the selling of bathing
suits
being higher during April, rather than in other
months
. On one hand, the temperatures for the first two
months
of 2012, remained basically unchanged, they stood at roughly 30° Fahrenheit.
After
this
, from February to June, they had a steady increase, reaching their peak in June, with roughly 65° Fahrenheit.
On the other hand
,
sales
grew constantly for the first three
months
, with January having 100.000
dollars
and March 150.000
dollars
. The next month, from
this
moderate growth, the
sales
started to climb steadily, with April reaching revenue of almost 300.000
dollars
, which was the peak in vending of bathing
suits
among these
months
. With summer approaching, the
sales
of bathing
suits
begin to drop rapidly, with May having solely 70.000
dollars
and June 10.00o
dollars
, which is,
instead
, the lowest point in the disposal.
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