The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012.

The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012.
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how the average temperature data and the revenue for the
sales
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of bathing
suits
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in New York for the early half of 2012.
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, there was an increase in temperature as we reached the summer, with the selling of bathing
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being higher during April, rather than in other
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. On one hand, the temperatures for the first two
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of 2012, remained basically unchanged, they stood at roughly 30° Fahrenheit.
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, from February to June, they had a steady increase, reaching their peak in June, with roughly 65° Fahrenheit.
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,
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grew constantly for the first three
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, with January having 100.000
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and March 150.000
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. The next month, from
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moderate growth, the
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started to climb steadily, with April reaching revenue of almost 300.000
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, which was the peak in vending of bathing
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among these
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. With summer approaching, the
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of bathing
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begin to drop rapidly, with May having solely 70.000
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and June 10.00o
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, which is,
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, the lowest point in the disposal.
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