Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative developments?

With the huge development of technology, we can see every person depending upon various types of
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gadgets
such
as mobile
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, computers, desktops etc. We can see
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phones
in the hand of most
of
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the
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kids
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and most of them spend hours on
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every day
due to
their addiction. I think
this
is a negative development. In the present context of the world, almost every individual seeks
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better facilities and
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to make their work easier by using different modern devices. People from different age groups mostly
use
mobile
phone
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for different
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.
Apart from
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we can see mostly
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children
using mobile
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for
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hours
on
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each day. They are addicted to it. Parents whenever they are busy with their work provide cell
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to their
children
to keep them away from their work. The careless behaviour of every
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to the continuous
use
of
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phone
by a child. Despite
of
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knowing
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consequences many people still don't change
this
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habit
and
as a
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children
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to suffer.
Although
it may provide knowledge to the
children
, it may hamper their health condition. Continuously
use
of mobile
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may cause
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and even loss of
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. In most
of
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cases
due to
the excessive
use
of mobile
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we can see kids being dull and antisocial. In contrary to
this
, they might get
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in illegal activities
such
as hacking, cracking etc.
On the other hand
, there might be some advantages. They can learn different things from home. Not only
this
they can
also
get information about the current
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affairs met
of the world. They can get
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to explore the field of their interest.
Instead
of travelling far away for quality
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they can learn all things from any corner of
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by attending virtual classes which can be for free.
In addition
to
this
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they can
also
use
it for entertainment
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and
also
to capture important movements.
Overall
, rather than being social and
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most of the
children
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to spend time alone
due to
the influence of
phones
.
However
, the demerits of using mobile
phones
simply out weights it's merit.
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