Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this case? Do you think this is positive or negative development?

With the huge development of technology, we can see every person depending upon various types of gadgets
such
as mobile
phones
, computers, desktops etc. We can see smartphones in the hand of most kids nowadays and most of them spend hours on them every day
due to
their addiction. I think
this
is a negative development. In the present context of the world, almost every individual seeks better facilities and tries to make their work easier by using different modern devices. People from different age groups mostly
use
mobile
phones
for different purposes. Apart from,
this
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we can see mostly
children
using mobile
phones
for many hours each day. They are addicted to it. Parents whenever they are busy with their work provide cell
phones
to their
children
to keep them away from their work. The careless behaviour of every guardian gives rise to the continuous
use
of the mobile phone by a child. Despite knowing its consequences many people still don't change
this
habit and as a
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result
children
have to suffer.
Although
it may provide knowledge to the
children
, it may hamper their health condition. Continuously
use
of mobile
phones
may cause headaches and even loss of eyesight. In most cases
due to
the excessive
use
of mobile ,
phones
we can see kids being dull and antisocial. Contrary to
this
, they might get involved in illegal activities
such
as hacking, cracking etc.
On the other hand
, there might be some advantages. They can learn different things from home. Not only
this
they can
also
get information about the current affairs met of the world. They can get a chance to explore the field of their interest.
Instead
of travelling far away for quality ,education they can learn all things from any corner of the world by attending virtual classes which can be for free.
In addition
to ,
this
they can
also
use
it for entertainment purposes and
also
to capture important movements.
Overall
, rather than being social and creative most of the
children
tend to spend time alone
due to
the influence of
phones
.
However
, the demerits of using mobile
phones
simply out weights it's merit
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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