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Some people believe that reading is always a good habit. Others feel it depends on which books a person is reading. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#people #habit #books #person
These days, the reading of
books
 is gradually decreasing
due to
 the rise in technology like computers, mobile phones, etc, but many
people
 believe that reading is a good habit.
However
, it depends on which book are we reading. Most
people
 admit that reading
books
 is good for our
eyes
 rather than the
use
 of a computer or phone on an often basis as it doesn't
make
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 any damage to our
eyes
 like other electronic things. As proven by scientists, display emits blue radiations that, heavily damage the vision of the eye.
For example
, Forbes published a report regarding the damage caused to the
eyes
 by the
use
 of electronic screens. It tells that, in the previous few decades, as technology has
made growth
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 and the
use
 of electronic devices has increased, the vision of the eye has decreased from 80 to 31 in every 100
people
. Some
people
also
 hold a strong perspective that reading
books
also
 depends on what type of
books
 we read. The fact is that many
people
 feel that reading newspapers can make
people
 more updated about the ongoing affairs of the world than reading comics or love stories.
Moreover
, the youth is more concentrated on reading love stories and get diverted in their life. A good illustration of
this
 is my nephew who
use
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 to read
this
 type of comics very much and got influenced by a fake girl and she cheated on him and he went into depression. So, it is very important what we read in
books
.
To conclude
, from above mentioned topics my opinion is reading a book is more important for our
eyes
 than using
of
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electronic screens and in that
also
 what we read is more important.
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Expand on the points made in the introduction and conclusion to provide a more thorough discussion of both sides.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mental stimulation
  • knowledge acquisition
  • vocabulary expansion
  • stress reduction
  • memory improvement
  • analytical thinking
  • empathy
  • emotional intelligence
  • social cues
  • constructive content
  • morally uplifting
  • misinformation
  • harmful ideologies
  • critical reading skills
  • credible sources
  • inherently good habit
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