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Some people think cities are the best place to live.Others prefer to live in the countryside.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays where to live is a difficult question for
people
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. A wide range of
people
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 believe that it is better to live in the
city
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while
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 others choose the countryside as a place to live in.
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agree
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 with the first point of view and will give the reason why First of
all
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 it is convincing that living in
metropolitan
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the metropolitan
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 area is more
convenience
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 to communicate.
To begin
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 with, why urbanization
become
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 to increased and become a trend in a lot of societies because it
offer
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they
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apply
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many great job and high income.
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, in a large
city
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 there are a wide range of famous
hospital
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hospitals
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, public transport and
another location
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other locations
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 that you can find to help
people
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 in daily life.
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However
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city
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 life is not good for
people
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’s health .
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, crime is always a difficult problem to face
with
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apply
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for
people
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 who want to live in
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city
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the city
a city
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 Another point
that
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 living in the landscape will be good for
people
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’s health.
First
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 there
are
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is
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 a lot of
tree
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trees
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 that you can find and the public transport is not much or industrial noise.
Second
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 it is safe for
child
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children
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 and
kid
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kids
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 because of the
unpopular
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unpopularity
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 of public transport and
vehicle
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vehicles
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.
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,
countryside
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the countryside
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may
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maybe
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be become
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become
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 boring for young
people
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 and
people
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 who want to improve themselves or want to become more fashionable Taking everything into account, staying in the cities is better than the terrain because it's convenient.
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,
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 essay has demonstrated clear points to support living in urban.
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