The diagram below show how leather goods are produced.
The diagram illustrates the way in which
Luther
goods are produced.
At the onset, Change noun form
Luther's
it is clear that
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there are 11 stages in the process, begging with drying the Remove the comma
apply
skin
under sun
for Add an article
the sun
few
days, and culminating in producing the product in Correct article usage
a few
factory
.
To start, the Add an article
the factory
skin
deliver to factory
in order to Correct article usage
the factory
washing
it, by using water and lime, next stage is soaking it
in lime to remove natural fate, after that the Change the verb
wash
skin
going
through Wrong verb form
goes
rolling
machine to Correct article usage
a rolling
flattens
the washed
Wrong verb form
flatten
skin
, following
this
the skin
is colored
by tanning the Change the spelling
coloured
skin
in mixed water and vegetables
matter,
following that the Fix the agreement mistake
vegetable
skin
is polishing
to make it bright Wrong verb form
polished
then
Correct word choice
and then
transfer
Wrong verb form
transferred
it
to Correct pronoun usage
apply
Correct your spelling
final
Correct article usage
the finel
finel
stage, which is Correct your spelling
final
production
the
Correct article usage
the production
skin
to goods such
as bag
and shoes.Fix the agreement mistake
bags
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