The diagram details the process of making leather products. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the way in which
leather
products are made to be sold in the stores.
At the onset, it is clear that
there are 11 stages in the process, beginning with putting leather
in the sunlight and culminating in new goods.
To begin
, the leather
are put under the sun to make them dry. This
leather
is then
transported to the factory by truck. the factory assist to wash the leather
and remove unwant materilas. Following
this
, the leather
is put in lime soaking to make sure all unneeded mateirals has gone. Afterwords, leather
is rolted to be stirght and strong. Subsequently
, leather
is put into soaking with water and vegetable matter to add the colure.
The next phase, learher is polished on oreder to be with high quality for a long time. Once the stage is complated, the learger is sent to the factory and there is made a different shape goods. Finally
, the products are done and it can be sold as a different kind of goods.Submitted by s_syedy on
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