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In order to solve traffic problems, the government should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transport. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

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These days, traffic problems are increasing day by day, and some believe, in order to solve traffic problems by increasing the tax for private car owners heavily and using the money to improve the arrangement, there are pros and cons to
such
 a solution that we will discuss in
this
 essay.
While
 some countries have already implemented duties for automobile owners and they are improving the
system
 every day by using that money,
such
 as the United arab emirates, is collection tax in the form of tolls, parking fees and fines and that money is being used to build bridges, wide roads and other possible ways to tackle the traffic. And
this
 solution has provided many benefits to the
system
 like improved congestion, a low rate of accidents and improvements in the
overall
system
.
On the other hand
, heavy taxes can decrease the number of people buying their own car and driving it, it can have a huge impact on the automobile industry which is the main reason for a smoothly running economy. Mostly it will affect middle-class people, they earn a living for their families if they pay more taxes
then
 they will not be able to afford to feed their families.
To conclude
, in order to improve the road
system
 it is necessary for the government to tax, but not much
thus
 the public can live life comfortably as well, every country's government should think of their economy and decide if their public can afford it or not before imploying
such
 taxes.
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Address the prompt more thoroughly by providing specific examples and elaborating on the advantages and disadvantages of the proposed solution. Ensure that your ideas are well-supported and relevant to the topic.

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