The chart below shows figures for attendances at hospital emergency care departments in Northern Ireland by age group in December 2016 and 2017.

The chart below shows figures for attendances at hospital emergency care departments in Northern Ireland by age group in December 2016 and 2017.
The bar chart illustrates the visit of different age groups to the Casualty unit of a certain hospital in Northern Ireland in the month of December 2016 to 2017.
Overall
, from the chart, those aged 75 & above have higher emergency cases, followed by those under 5 years than other categories are relatively the same except aged 5 -15 which was the lowest. From December 2016, it was shown that the attendance of 75years and above to the clinic was at the rate of above 60.0, next was about 50.0 for those below 5,
then
the groups aged 14 - 44, 45 - 64, and 65 - 74 falls above 20.0 and stays within 30.0.
While
20.0 was for those Aging between 5 - 15.
Furthermore
, in 2017, they all experienced an increase in hospital visits, with a significant 10.0 top-up for 75 & above, second to people below 5 years rising up to 50.5,
then
the categories of 45 - 64 and 65 - 74 raised slightly by 0.4 and
lastly
, 0.2 increase for both the ages of 5 - 15 and 16 - 44 respectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart analysis
  • attendances
  • emergency care departments
  • trend
  • age group
  • patient admissions
  • year-on-year comparison
  • statistical variation
  • healthcare system
  • data interpretation
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • demographics
  • healthcare planning
  • resource management
  • peak times
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