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Some people think cities are the best place to live .Other prefer to live in the countryside .Discuss both view and give your own opinion .

#people #cities #place #countryside
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people
said
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 that
cities
 are the most comfortable
place
 to live .Other individuals think that living in
the
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rural areas is better.
This
 writer will agree with the best statement. It is absolutely agreed with the thinking
living
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of living
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 in
cities
 because
the
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of the
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 better
convenient
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convenience
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 that the
cities
that
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apply
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give us.
More over
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Moreover
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 when
people
living
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live
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 in the
cities
 they can gain more opportunities and get better jobs that help
they
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them
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 earn a lot of money. What is more
this
place
also
 have
many
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much
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biggest
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of biggest
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 company for you to contract and work with and the facilities is
such
 as great for you to live and relax at.
On the other hand
, if
people
 love the piece and fresh air
so that
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the countryside is the best
place
 for them to choose and live in.
Further more
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people
 in
the
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rural area
is
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are
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 very friendly and flexible for you to communicate and have fun with them. The best thing that
stay
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staying
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 in
countryside
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the countryside
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give
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gives
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 us
that
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is that
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 the money we
paid
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pay
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 is always less than living in
cities
. But the rural area isn’t good enough because the hospital, the school, and all the building
isn’t
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aren’t
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 as good as
cities
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in cities
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.
According to
 the
writer
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writer's
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 opinion, the writer
is think
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thinks
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 that living in
cities
 is better because the technology is very good and you can learn many things new. Another reason
that
is
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apply
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the
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school in
cities
are
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is
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 better than rural areas because it has many devices for student
study
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to study
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 and
work
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works
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 with. In conclusion, living in the
cities
 and
countryside
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the countryside
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 are both good but in my
opinion
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,opinion
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 the best
place
 that individuals need to choose
that
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apply
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is
cities
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the cities
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 because of the opportunities and the
convenient
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convenience
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 that it gives.
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