It is generally believed that some people are born with certains talents, for instance for sport or music, and other are not. However, it is sometimes claimed tha any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both the views and gie your own opinion.

Across the globe, every
person
has different capabilities, One segment of folk believes that there are some people who are born with some skills
such
as music and sports
whereas
other segments of folk think that it is learned by
practice
and by the support of any professional service. For me, it is a natural and
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gift
to any human. On the one hand, it is true that some pupils are born with it and when they start to
practice
it is easy for them to learn the song's rhythm and tune very fast compared to others.
Firstly
, it is very easy for them to sing a song and
practice
it,
secondly
, they have an interest in it to learn it
whereas
such
public loves to learn it without taking its burden.
For example
, they will copy any best sports players or musicians in a very smart way as compared to other
community
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.
Hence
, few
folk
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are born with
certain
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gift
which makes them unique.
On the other hand
,
such
talents can be taught in
the
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institutions and at home by the parents. In the first , place kids learn it with the support of their parents and teacher
while
in class and at home if they want it because
such
skills can be learned without having a natural knack.
Such
as there are many talented people who are born with
such
precious
gift
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which everyone is not.
Therefore
,
this
is a god-gifted talent that a
person
gets. To reiterate, some proponents of that it is already available in the
person
by birth
whereas
others consider that it is learned by any human. In my opinion, it is
such
a golden
gift
a
person
gets from god which is not achieved with the help of
practice
or with the use of continuous learning to play football or basketball. In, addition a talented
person
will achieve more success and fame as compared to another
person
who has not achieved it without the cooperation of others. So, there are a lot of differences in both views and people's opinions.
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