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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
#households #income #summarise #information #features #andmake #comparisons
The Bar graph illustrates information about the changes in the US households by annual income between 2007 and 2015,
data
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 presented
on
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in
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 4-years intervals.
Overall
, the highest income was over $100,000 or more
group
 in 2007, $25,000 ~ $49,999
group
 in 2011 and $100,000 or more in 2015. When it comes to
$
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the $
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75,000 ~ $ 99,999
group
 pattern, the
group
 figure did not
alomost
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almost
changed
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change
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 to about 15
millions
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million
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 during
in
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apply
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the survey. And, the number of
$
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the $
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50,000 ~ $ 74,999
group
 did not up and down to around 20
millions
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million
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too
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apply
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.
However
, the number of $100,000 or more
group
 had up and down to about 30
millions
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million
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, around 22
millions
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million
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, about 35
millions
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million
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 and in 2007,2011,2015
repectively
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respectively
.
Among between
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Between
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 2011 and 2015, they significantly increased by about 10
millions
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million
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.
Also
,
less
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the less
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 than $ 25,000
group
 and
$
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the $
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25,000 ~ $49,999
group
 had the same pattern.
that is
 increased by around 10
millions
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million
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 from 2007 to 2011 . And,
that
is
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apply
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decreased by about 3
millions
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million
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 between 2011 and 2015.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words group, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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