The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates how many
number of
old Correct quantifier usage
apply
shops
closed and new shops
started in one particular country over seven years of periods ( from 2011 to 2018)
Overall
, the number
of shop closures at the initial year
was low
than opening Replace the word
lower
shops
however
, at the end
of year
closures shops
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
high
than opening one. Replace the word
higher
Whereas
in between the year
witnessed remain fluctuated.
The average data of closed shop
was approximately 6,400 and it declined by 5,000 in 2012. It rose in 2013 and reached up to around 7,100. It was the highest Fix the agreement mistake
shops
number
in closed. Number
significantly diminished to below 1,000 in 2015. It was the least Add an article
The number
number
of shop
closed Fix the agreement mistake
shops
among
the Change preposition
in
year
. Then
, it sharply rose in 2016 to more than 5,000 and it almost plateau for next
3 years up to 2018.
In terms of opened Correct article usage
the next
shops
the Add a comma
,shops
number
was approximately 8,500 in 2011 and it significantly dropped to 4,000 in 2012. It started to rose
up after 2012 and land up to 6,000 in 2014. Wrong verb form
rise
again
it Capitalize word
Again
deceased
to 4,000 in 2015 but after 2015 it Correct your spelling
decreased
remain
relatively stable Wrong verb form
remained
to
Change preposition
for
next
3 Correct article usage
the next
year
. Fix the agreement mistake
years
And
Correct word choice
At
at
the Change preposition
in
last
year
in 2018, it slightly fell by around 11,000 and make
it to 3,000.Wrong verb form
made
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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