The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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line graph illustrates how much and what type of fast food
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Australian teenagers have taken in 15 years from 1975 to 2000.
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teenagers who ate pizza and
hamburgers
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increased highly between these years,
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the number of consumption did not change from 1995 to 2000 in both categories. Consumers of
hamburgers
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increased sharply in 1985,
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it continued its upward trend during the next years. The difference between the amount of
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and pizzas
took
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per
day
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in 2000 was around 15.
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, the count of times ate
fish
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and chips in a
day
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, had a downward trend from 1975 to 1985 and they showed partial growth until 1995
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when
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started to decrease. In 1997 the amount of time
hamburger
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hamburgers
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and
fish
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and
chip
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chips
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ate per
day
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were the same at 85. ,
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in 1994 the same amount of
fish
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and chips and pizza were shown in a
day
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.
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, Interest in pizza and
hamburgers
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had
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increased from the beginning but from 1995 it did not change.
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, most teenagers had the least interest in
fish
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and chips in modern more than in the past.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hamburgers, day, fish with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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