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Thetable below shows the consumer durables owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983

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The gives information on people living in Landon do households with a range of means in house from 1972 to 1993. The greatest increase was in
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 telephone. It was 42% in 1972 and arrived at 77% in 1983 The second liked means consumer was central heating. It nearly doubled, which was 37 % to 64%. Television was always by far the best means to compare to other consumers. The figure, slowly rose, in 1972 it showed 93% and in 1979 was 97% from 1979 to 1982 the chart remained steady and in 1983 only 1% added to 97% (98%) ,
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 vacuum cleaners seemed like TV From 87%, achieved 95% in 1982 but in 1983 it was completely faded. Refrigerators and washing machines made up the most used at home respectively in 1983 were 94%, and 80% both of them increased at the beginning of the year.When it comes to video , nobody uses it , it just consists of .7 18 % in 1973 turning to a dishwasher , there are a for people use it. It slightly increased
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, many people who live in Britain prefer machines and use there which TV and refrigerators
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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