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The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first table chart illustrates a comparison between the top 5 reasons why
people
 want to give up smoking and the number of cigarettes that they smoke per day. The second table chart compares when smokers intend to do it with the number of cigarettes smoked per day.
Overall
, it can be argued that,
people
 that the most common reason why
people
 want to write down smoking is their health condition.
On the other hand
, family pressure seems to be less important. Talking about the timing in which
people
 decide to stop smoking, the majority of them believe that they can do it during a period of 6 months.
While
,
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 only a minor percentage reckons that they can reach their goal in one month. Focusing more on details, more than 60% of
people
 believe that they have to stop smoking to enhance a better health condition. Family pressure and present health problems do not present a big percentage. In fact, it goes around 10-20 %.
Moreover
, only 10-20 % of
people
 think they can stop smoking in a short period of time.
On the contrary
, a percentage that fluctuates around 26 and 46 % of
people
 believe that they can give up in 6 months.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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