The graph below shows consumers’ average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010.

The graph below shows consumers’ average annual expenditure on cell phone,

national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010.
The line graph illustrates the data about the amount of average annual expenditure on three categories, namely
cell
phone
, national and international
fixed-line
services
in the United States during a ten-year
period
from 2001 to 2010.
Overall
,
while
the yearly spending on mobile phones increased significantly, the opposite was true for national landline
phone
expenditure.
Also
, the figure for international
fixed-line
services
was lowest during the
period
. It can be clearly observed from the chart that
while
the amount of money spent on
cell
phone
services
was the highest position of three with exactly $700, the figures consumed for international
fixed-line
services
and national
fixed-line
services
were approximately $250 and $200, respectively, in 2001. During the next five years, the average yearly expenditure on
cell
phone
services
witnessed a considerable rise to $500.
By contrast
, the figure for national
fixed-line
services
dramatically decreased to $500 and annual spending on international
fixed-line
services
experienced a slight fluctuation
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$300. In terms of the other
period
of time, the average annual spending on
cell
phone
services
had a substantial growth from $500 in 2006 to over $700 in 2010 which reached
the
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peak in the final year,
whereas
there was a significant decline of $100 in the average yearly spending on national
fixed-line
services
.
Besides
that, the figure for international
fixed-line
services
witnessed
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stability at $300 over the final
period
.
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  • expenditure
  • annual
  • fixed-line services
  • consumer preferences
  • technological advancements
  • economic factors
  • speculate
  • trends
  • notable change
  • shifts in consumer behavior
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