The two diagrams below describe changes to a museum's floor plan between 2008 and 2012.

The two diagrams below describe changes to a museum's floor plan between 2008 and 2012.
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The given maps illustrate a museum's floor plan after a renovation from 2008 to 2012.
Overall
, over the period, the building underwent dramatic changes
such
as 2 floors being added, the lift being located, and the Cloakroom being relocated. As can be seen, in 2008, a path was in the west of the museum that connected to the entry, just before the reception which was built next to the reading area.
Moreover
, the gallery and changing room were situated under the entrance and reading place respectively.
In addition
, the shop and stairs had built between them. After the development in 2012, the location and size of the path, gallery, shop and reading place did not change. The reception was rebuilt to reduce its size and merged with the cloakroom .
Furthermore
, where the children's play area and entrance hall stand, there used to be a changing room and entry. It is
also
worth mentioning that the stairs were destroyed to make way for a lift which climbs to the 4th floor.
In addition
, a new restaurant, terrace and self-service cafe were constructed on the right and left of the lift respectively.
Also
, a new exhibition area was set up above the self-service cafe.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, in addition".
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Floor plan
  • Renovation
  • Expansion
  • Spatial distribution
  • Accessibility
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit
  • Gallery
  • Interactive displays
  • Historical artifacts
  • Educational facilities
  • Visitor amenities
  • Foot traffic
  • Layout alteration
  • Modernize
  • Gift shop
  • Cafeteria
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