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death penalty should be applied in order to restore justice. do you agree?

#death #penalty #justice
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In the
world
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 there are many countries that use punishments to restore order and calm in society. There are several types of methodologies to get authority back. The
death
penalty
 and
penalty
 servitude for life are the most common kinds of penalizations.
Nonetheless
,
this
 essay is totally based on opinions about the
death
penalty
 and how beneficial it is for society.
Firstly
, the population completely agrees and they know that the only solution that a country has in order to restore authority is through of
death
penalty
. Several people think
that is
 a good idea, not only because individuals will think twice before making a mistake, but
also
 because the victims will feel real justice. Recent studies, and statistics taken from the University of Nevada, show that soft punishments create chaos and generate an unsafe place to live and criminals will play with justice like a useless toy.
Secondly
, some groups of people think that
this
 is a good punishment for rapes and murderers. To commit sexual violence or to kill people, must be a motive to punish criminals with the
death
penalty
. It does not matter if is the first time and even less
,
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 if the rapist or murders are not adults. The University of Toronto, located in Canada, 10 years ago, approved the law regarding killing
this
 kind of person previously mentioned. In conclusion, the majority of the population in the whole world considers
that is
 really important to generate
this
 kind of punishment for communities that do not respect life or human rights. The
death
penalty
 is a good method to control and restore justice.
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