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newspapers and television news programs do not effect most people therefore spending time on reading and watching Tv is a waste of time.to what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#newspapers #television #news #programs #effect #people #time #tv #waste
Nowadays there are many forms of entertainment and to get informed. Some
people
 believe that watching
TV
 and reading newspapers
are
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 a
waste
 of
time
 as it has nothing to do with a person's life and it doesn't affect mankind. I totally disagree with
this
 notion.
This
 essay will
further
 elaborate my views. There is a plethora of reasons that it's not a
waste
 of
time
. First and foremost is the latest update of the world and even local areas of cities.
Due to
 the
,
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fact
people
 have their businesses, they need to know the market situation and how to cope with the problems, particularly the economy and inflation. Other than that newspaper and
TV
 programs provide possible upcoming threats and how to deal with them. For
an
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example ,
news
 about COVID-19 , and how it spreads and affects various things were out to be so important to human beings. Analysing and explaining
further
, another point is general knowledge.
some
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 travel lovers fancy to know about
oversea
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news
 and updates. Not all the viewers get the chance to travel to other countries , so
the
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tv
 programs and
news
 are the best options for them.
Moreover
,
TV
news
 are even used for educational purpose as most of
news
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 is telecast in almost every language with subtitles so
people
 can enhance their lingual skills by watching the
news
 on
TV
. In ,addition children advance their knowledge about science. To illustrate, live
news
 regarding space rockets
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landed
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 on the moon can boost children's confidence and they get interested in studying science.
On the contrary
 , some
news
 doesn't have any connection to
people
's lives and
waste
 of
time
such
 as the lifestyles of famous actors and cricketers.
News
 about someone's life will not benefit anyone. To recapitulate, even though all the
news
 and
TV
programms
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programmes
programs
 do not affect
people
but
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some
news
 bring various benefits to
people
such
 as education and important information about the globe . ,
Personally
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i
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 believe
its
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it's
it is
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not
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,not
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 a
waste
 of
time
 at all
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