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Hard work and determination are the main requirements for success in life. Others think other factors are more important. Discuss both views?

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In
this
 day's age, a
person
's
success
 requires numerous
factors
, Some agree that it depends on how much effort and passion you put into the
work
,
while
 others believe that there are many more
factors
 that should
also
 be considered to achieve
success
 in life. Personally, both ideas are essential, but the latter takes precedence over the former in many cases. First of all, hard
work
 and passion are the
two
 essential elements for a
person
 to
gain
 extreme
success
.
This
 can be seen in many celebrities, especially sports players, who
work
 hard and
determine
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play
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 a key role in their careers.
For example
, Cristina Ronaldo, a well-known football player in history, since a child Despite having poor facilities, he still never gave up his dream to become a professional player.
Moreover
, even already become a famous football player, he still has a significant workout and practice in his schedule, his passion is turning into a great inspiration for the younger generations.
Besides
, determination is the true power to keep him working that much, these
two
factors
 have created a real legend in world football history. On the one hand, the fact that having only those
two
 personalities was not enough to help people
gain
 achievement. Living in a century that has numerous developments in every category, a
person
 must be required more than just hard
work
 and determination
such
 as
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 being talented, honest, loyal and so on. If an individual has none of the ability and talent for their
work
, it could be challenging for them to
gain
success
 in the short term. Meanwhile, people who are both talented and
work
 hard for their
job
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 will have more opportunities to improve their careers in the future. There are many who believe that they rather choose people who
work
 smarter than
work
 hard. In conclusion, achieving
success
 was never told to be that easy,
besides
, there is more competition in every category. So looking at reality, it is particularly important for a
person
 to
gain
 more than
two
factors
 to become successful.
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