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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050
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The pie charts have shown
that
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the
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 percentage of
number
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a number
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 of residents between Yemen and Italy in three groups in 2000 and
projection
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the projection
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 for 2050. In Yemen, the
population
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 in the youngest age
group
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, 0-14
years
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 old, accounted for over 50% of the total
population
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 of the country in the year 2000, and
this
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 proportion is expected to decrease by the year 2050.
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, in Italy, the number of people in the age
group
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 above 60
years
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 old is projected to nearly double by the year 2050. The young
population
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group
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 in Yemen, aged 0-14
years
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 old is projected to decrease from 50.1% to 37% over the span of 50
years
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,
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 the
middle-age
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middle-aged
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population
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group
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, 15-59
years
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 old, is expected to increase from 46.3% to 57.3%. Meanwhile, the elderly
population
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group
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 above 60
years
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 old is anticipated to experience a slight increase and maintain the lowest proportion on the chart throughout the 50-year period. The oldest
population
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group
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 in Italy, aged above 60
years
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 old, is trending towards doubling in the span of 50
years
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, increasing from 24.1% to 42.3%,
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 the middle-age
population
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group
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, 15-59
years
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 old, is projected to decrease from 61.6% to 46.2%. Meanwhile, the youngest age
group
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, aged 0-14
years
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 old, is expected to experience a slight decline from 14.3% to 11.5%, and it will hold the lowest proportion in Italy's
population
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, group, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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