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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
People
 can go everywhere to
study
 and can choose where they want to
work
. For me, I would like to choose where I want to
work
 rather than distinguish where I
study
 .
For example
, my sister wanted to be a cook so she went to France to
study
. Because she thought that she could get more professional skills and had completed training rather than going to a cooking school in
Taiwan
. And after she finished her
study
 she back to
Taiwan
 and opened a restaurant. If she stayed in France maybe she could only
work
 at other restaurants. Owning a restaurant in France was too competitive and hard to successful and she wanted to bring the technical back to
Taiwan
 to teach more
people
 who are interested in cooking. For me, I want to
study
 in the US to learn more skills in software engineering and after I finish my
study
 I prefer to stay in the US to find a job. I want to stay here if someone requires me to do it because I think Silicon Valley has very opportunities for me to get a high-salary job compared with the job in
Taiwan
 and maybe if I am tired of life in Silicon Valley I will change the
others
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 place to
work
. In conclusion,
people
 will go to other countries to get higher education but not all of them want to
work
 in the country where they
study
. Someone may want to make some contribution to their own country so I believe
people
 can choose where they want to
work
 .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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