Bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emissions in different countries during three different years.

Bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emissions in different countries during three different years.
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The bar graph outlines the
carbon
output
from various countries and
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the gradual increase over the decades for
majority
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the majority
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of the countries, except for Germany and the United Kingdom. For Germany, it can be noted that from 1975 to 1990, their
carbon
emission
has
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remained the same; a little over 200,000
tonnes
, with the year 2005 seeing a drop.
Likewise
, the United Kingdom,
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has kept
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carbon
output
below 200,000 tones from 1975 to 2005, has demonstrated a decrease over the years. Contrary to the previously mentioned countries,
USA
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and China have shown a very obvious disparity from their European counterparts. By 2005, both states
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had the highest
carbon
emission, with records reaching almost 1,600,000
tonnes
.
Although
China's
carbon
output
has been well over 500,000
tonnes
behind
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the USA
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from the years 1975 to 1990, their new record in 2005 is subpar
to
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them
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,
also
highlighting the dramatic jump of their
output
by almost a million
tonnes
.
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