The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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of
visitors
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to a particular Caribbean
island
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over a period of seven years (2010 to 2017).
Overall
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, the total
number
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of
tourists
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increased between 2010 and 2017, and the
figure
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for
tourists
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who stayed on
cruise
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ships
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showed a similar trend. Staying on the
island
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was a more popular choice before the second half of 2015, and
then
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was exceeded by the
cruise
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ship option. From 2010 to 2013, the
number
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of
visitors
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staying on the
island
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rose from 0.75
million
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to about 1.5
million
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,
while
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the
figure
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for
visitors
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who stayed on
cruise
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ships
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fluctuated between 0.25
million
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and 0.5
million
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. The
figure
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for
visitors
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staying on the
island
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remained stable between 2013 and 2017 with the exception of 2011 (1.25
million
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).
By contrast
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, the
number
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of
tourists
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staying on
cruise
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ships
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had consistently risen to 2
million
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by 2017. It should be noticed that
although
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the
figure
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for
visitors
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staying on the
island
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remained higher than that of on
cruise
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ships
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, the gap between them continuously narrowed, and was overtaken in the second half of 2015, which means that staying on
cruise
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ships
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had become the most popular option for
tourists
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when visiting Caribbean
island
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.
Although
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the
figure
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for
visitors
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staying on the
island
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and on
cruise
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ships
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showed different trends, the total
number
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of
tourists
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coming to the Caribbean
island
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had grown steadily to 3.5 times as many as the
number
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in 2010 (1
million
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).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, island, tourists, figure, cruise, ships, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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