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Nowadays many people choose to be selfemployed,rather than to work for a company or organsination .Why might this be case? Disadvantages of selfemployment.

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In
a
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 modern era ,
majority
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the majority
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 of folks prefer to start their own ventures despite several decades ago when the most of employees
work
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 in companies or institutions .
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be
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discuss
about
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the reasons
of
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increasing
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an increasing
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 number of self-employed
persons
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people
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 and
also
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 point out the disadvantages of
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 scheme. There are myriad things to be shared in its favour regarding increasing trends in
self employment
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self-employment
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.First and foremost
flok
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 are willing and able to start innovative business because availability of unlimited source of information using advanced technologies.
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, there is no extra cost for data
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analysis
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,only one click is enough to
gathering
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 and go through
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 data.
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, no need
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for
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 huge capital investment
cmpared
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compared
 to
past
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the past
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 because we have enough support from virtual media help to create demand and supply of
product
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products
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 on
free
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a free
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 land basis.
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, it is more convenient to handle time and have
freedom
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the freedom
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 to contribute more ideas and
skill
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skills
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 to venture helps to enhance our capacity and ability.
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,
majority
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the majority
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 of people having android
mobilephones
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mobile phones
 can convently and easily available all
source
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sources
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 of information
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 as demand,supply,price,
competition
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and competition
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 in
global
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the global
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 market in one click.
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, there are lots of demerits
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includes
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include
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this
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 type of career.
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,financial loss
occured
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occurred
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 seasonal variations and
unpreditable
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unpredictable
 events
life
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like
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 natural calamities.
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, it badly
affect
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affects
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 not only
offical
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official
 life but
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 personal life.
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,some people might have to leave their
business
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businesses
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 because they could not feel a sense of satisfaction in terms of income and benefits.
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, they
not
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do not
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 get enough time to spend with family.
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, The Business School Of Management
conduct
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conducted
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 a survey about
satisfaction
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the satisfaction
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 level of self-employed persons that they
are
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were
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 not satisfied
at
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with
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this
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the
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 results.
To sum up
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,
this
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 type of occupation has different aspects,
if
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 someone is ready to start
self-venture
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a self-venture
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 should properly
planned
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plan
be planned
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 and try to avoid common hindrances in
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 field.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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