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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is how to be good member os society.Teaching children to be one of the good member of our society has become an essential part of our life

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is how to be
good
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a good
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 member
os
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of
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society
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.Teaching
children
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 to be one of the good
member
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members
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 of our
society
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 has become an essential part of our life.
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, there is no absolute agreement on whether
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behavior
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behaviour
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 of
children
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 in
socety
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society
 should be taught by
parents
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 or school. A commonly held belief that
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becoming
great
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a great
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 part of
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society
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are depend
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 on
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 and should be taught by them.As evidence of
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this
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 they point to carrying
main
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the main
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 part of their education and giving
right
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the right
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advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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of
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on
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 life.
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,
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 natural for
children
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 to copy and act like their
parents
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.It could be explained by the
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fact
thats
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that
 not enough to just tell and teach how they actually should do
cause
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because
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 the
parents
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 are live
example
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 who
full
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 of each experience. As
result
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, it leads to
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defining
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 which road they'll
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take
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 and which way they'll act in
society
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.
On the other hand
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, some people claim that school is the place where
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children
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 have to
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 how to be good
member
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members
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 of
society
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.
For example
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 , they may mention that in
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 class that
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 of
diffrent
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different
 kids they'll naturally understand how to act.
In addition
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,
practical
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a practical
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 way of learning is always better than
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 study.The explanation lies
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 fact that in school
children
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 are separate from
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parents
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their parents
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 or
an
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apply
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adults which means
independ
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independent
, so they learn to make a friend, develop
diffrent
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different
 characteristics and
to
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protect
own
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their own
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 rights.
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children
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 grow up by forming
own
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their own
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personality
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personalities
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that is
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unic
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unique
. In
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conclusion
cnclusion
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conclusion
, taking everything mentioned into account
i
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 would argue that by forming new
personality
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personalities
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 and teaching them how to be good members of
society
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 the golden middle should be considered and never forgo

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