The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015.

The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015.
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The bar chart illustrates the
rates
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of adult male smokers in seven different countries,
along with
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the global average, for the years 2000 and 2015.
Overall
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, there was a general decline in the prevalence of male smokers across most countries and globally from 2000 to 2015.
However
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, Armenia, Bangladesh, and Cuba stood out with smoking
rates
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surpassing the world average. In the year 2000, Armenia, Bangladesh, and Cuba exhibited higher smoking
rates
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than the global average, reaching 65%, 62%, and 52% respectively. Meanwhile, the worldwide average was 42%. Other countries had percentages ranging from approximately 34% to 36%, except for Australia, which had a lower rate of 29%.
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, by 2015, smoking
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had dropped significantly for the world average, Armenia, Mexico, and Australia, all decreasing by about 10%. Bangladesh experienced the most substantial decline, with a reduction of around 20%.
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, Cuba showed a slight decrease from 52% to 51%.
On the contrary
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, Egypt and Lebanon were the exceptions, both seeing an increase in smoking
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, with percentages rising from 35% to 49% and 45% respectively by 2015.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • adult male smokers
  • world average
  • time frame
  • notable differences
  • trends
  • reductions
  • increases
  • smoking rates
  • global smoking trends
  • insights
  • summarize
  • overall trends
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