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Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by they clothes they wear. Discuss both these views and give your own opiniom. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Some
people
 argue that
clothes
 are so important since they indicate
people
's preference
whereas
 another argument says, the
clothes
 worn do not tell anything.
This
 paper will discuss both of these arguments and state personal opinion in the end. Most
people
 believe
clothes
 represent many things
such
 as personality and social status.
For example
, when
people
 have an interview for work, they want to be seen as having a good personality and trustworthy;
hence
, they are trying to wear formal
clothes
 rather than casual ones. Another example is, that celebrities are keen on wearing expensive
clothes
 to sustain their glamorous image.
This
 act somehow indicates social status when
people
 want to maintain an image as rich or wealthy
people
.
However
, there are still
people
 who think
clothes
 should not be an indicator to see what
people
’s preferences since
clothes
 are only about function and nothing more than that. By arguing
this
 means
clothes
 can be used simply to protect the body from extreme weather.
Thus
,
clothes
 are nothing about
people
's personality or preference but only cover the body. I personally think
people
 should not be judged by anything they wear, since it is not fair. I think we should see
clothes
 only because of their function and based on our needs.
Moreover
, there are many areas to see what
people
is
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 like
such
 as how they manage their money or how they manage their relationship with others. Those things still can tell many more than what
clothes
 are shown. In conclusion, some
people
 might judge
people
’s preference by their
clothes
 and some might not, since
clothes
 is only
clothes
, nothing more.
Hence
, I am likely to see
clothes
 as they are without associating them with
people
's personalities because it is just unfair.
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