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IELTS Academic The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

IELTS Academic The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart depicts the electric appliance ownership changes and time spent on housework in households between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there are three electric appliances. Vacuum cleaner and Refrigerator has an upward trend and Washing machine has a fluctuating trend .
To begin
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 with, the Washing machine had 40 per
cent
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 of households in 1920 and reached 70 per
cent
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 of people utilising them in 1960.
Moreover
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, it fell in 1980 and managed to rise in 2000.
In addition
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, the Refrigerator has a rise in variation. It reached a peak during 1980 and remains equal till the era.
Furthermore
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, vacuum cleaner has 30 per
cent
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 of people used them in 1920.
However
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, it has an increased variation and reached a peak in 2000. Despite ,
this
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 the hours spent on housing
works
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 50 per
cent
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 during 1920, but it got a dramatic fall trend during the period.
Nevertheless
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, it has only 10 per
cent
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 of working hours in 2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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