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The use of social media such as Twitter and Facebook is replacing face-to-face contact for many people in their everyday life. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is true that technology and social
media
 are becoming more and more developed. They become an indispensable part of our lives.
Although
 there are some benefits of social platforms, I would argue that there are far more drawbacks The main benefit of the trend towards using social
media
 is that we can make
friends
 with a lot of people. To illustrate, we just need a click to add
friends
 with someone on Facebook or just follow each other on Instagram to make new
friends
. People
also
 create a lot of community that attracts an ever-widening circle of society having the same habits. Another advantage effect is we can easily get in touch with our
friends
 and family.
For instance
, if our
friends
 go abroad, we can not talk to each other.
However
, social applications contribute to connecting us with them. Social
media
 play an important role in our lives and make it easier than ever Despite the positives mentioned above, I believe that social
media
 is a negative development for various reasons.
To begin
 with, there are several communication skill issues involved in using social platforms. Chatting too much with others in a virtual environment can leave us unable to talk with people in real life. We will become less confident and feel hard when we need to talk with someone.
Furthermore
, scammers appear more through social
media
. There have been a lot of scams on Facebook that have been posted on VTV. With the increase of scamming on social
media
, we should put more resources into developing our awareness In conclusion,
while
 I recognise the possible advantages of social platforms, I consider it to be a negative development
overall
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