The supplied map gives data on the developments that were at the seaside resort of Templeton from 1990 to 2005

The map depicts data on the seaside hotel of Templeton development between 1990 and 2005.

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, it can be seen that major development of the city has been done in the southwest

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, the southeast

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also

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has developed a lot.

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with, the northeast

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had many trees during 1990, but it was removed and renovated into buildings and houses in 2005.

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, the northwest area remains almost unchanged

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but introduced an airport and numerous houses.

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, the ways of the road are well connected in the north and parking has enlarged.

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, the southeast

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had only plants and empty land in 1990, but later refurbished the land and introduced factories and ferries in 2005.

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, the railway station remains unchanged,

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, it enlarged the train routes all over the city. Despite

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, the southwest area consisted of plants and trees in 1990

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but brought changes and developed many buildings and supermarkets.

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, the roadways and railways are well connected.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

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The supplied map gives data on the developments that were at the seaside resort of Templeton from 1990 to 2005

Nowadays many people eat very badly in spite of the information which is available about ways to have a healthy, balanced diet. What could be the possible causes of this? Suggest some solutions which may improve the eating habits of the young.

￼Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or individual countries. In other words, it is an international problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is a common aspiration among many young people to run their own business, rather than work for an employer. Do you think the advantages of working for yourself outweigh the drawbacks?

Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or individual countries. In other words, it is an international problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?