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The charts show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK.

The charts show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK.
The pie chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the
expenditure
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 and income on
food
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 and
clothes
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 per family in the UK.
Overall
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, it is clear from the pie charts that the higher
expenditure
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 was on meat, fish, fruit and vegetables between 2010 and 2013. As far as the table, there was little change in both years (2010 and 2013).
To begin
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 with, the average income in the UK was 29000 in 2010,
while
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 in 2013
this
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 figure decreased to 25000.Spending on
food
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 and
clothes
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 accounted for 14000 in 2010,
whereas
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 in 2013
this
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 figure increased to 15000. As far as pictures, in 2010 the
expenditure
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 on fruit and vegetables accounted for 26% which is two times higher than the
expenditure
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 on
clothes
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 in 2013,
however
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, the figures for other
food
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 was 18% and it was still unchanged in 2013.
Furthermore
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, in 2013 the figures for
food
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 and vegetables was 30% which is
also
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 two times bigger than
clothes
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 in 2010.
In addition
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 to
this
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, daily products accounted for only 12% in 2010,
whereas
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 in 2013
this
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 figure jumped to 16%.
Finally
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, meat and fish in 2010 and 2013 accounted for 29% and 23% respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, food, clothes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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